Atonement
We were so good together,
You and I,
our frivolous laughter and sounds of joy,
still ring in my ears.
Oh!
How I yearn those years.
There were days when we sat together,
watching dusk turn to night,
by the beach or beside a brook,
whilst I sipped my coffee and read a book.
Your presence was always comforting,
like air for my sustenance,
or water to quench my thirst.
but,
Alas!
Those days have come to pass,
I leave my house,
But to you sans glance.
You bide your time,
and sometimes give a gentle nudge,
remind me of my past transgressions,
and yet give me another chance
Yet that too I spurn,
and I let you burn to cinder.
slowly as you can bear it no longer,
tornadoes start to churn the ocean,
volcanoes spew ash into the sky,
and the entire earth begins to shake and groan.
I do wish I could help you Mother,
I do try so very hard,
Mother Nature!
For our trespasses,
do forgive us,
for we are ignorant
and we know not what we do!
Mukund P Rao (March 26)
beautiful. its wonderfully written.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful ! I'm impressed Mukund. Wasn't aware that you wrote poetry.
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely Mukund. Very profound. You should put up the very apt title 'Atonement', up at the top line. I just love the progression of this poem.
ReplyDeleteJust an idea that you may or may not agree with - I notice how you use nature and natural phenomena as descriptors (very clever, as the poem is about Nature) - such as air for sustenance, water, beach, volcanoes etc. The only place where it seemed incongruous was where you 'sipped my coffee and read a book'.
One could argue that coffee comes from beans, a natural product. But today, coffee is more seen as a very processed, very commercialised product. I would rather use something more in tandem with the theme of your poem. Something more organic. Like hearing a nightingale sing, or seeing an orange sunset, or counting waves even, while reading a book.
Thanks a lot! lol I never put that much thought into the line though. :P
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